Greetings! All being well, the first nine chapters of 'Dragonline' should be on the Authonomy site by the end of the weekend. And I've come-up with what will hopefully be the final form of the Long Pitch that'll proceed them. This is it:
21st Century Britain has become a failed state. Climate Change, Peak Oil and war have caused the collapse of western civilisation. Regional warlords have gained power and scramble to control the few resources the country still holds. Violent conflict is a frequent occurrence. Now, a new movement – the ‘Ironsides’ – have arisen in the north, modelling themselves on Oliver Cromwell’s ‘Roundheads’ of old. Their growing power threatens to engulf the entire island.
Patrick Kynaston, a soldier and former Police Officer in the service of a New Marcher Lord in Shropshire, stands in their way. Escaping the clutches of the Ironside Army after a devastating battle, he begins a journey that will take him to the limits and beyond of both human endurance and experience, and a quest to bring hope to a broken and devastated land…
It's a bit shorter than the other one and, I think you may agree, a bit snappier! What do you think? Does this one reach out and grab you?
I'm happy with the short pitch as it stands, so that'll still be the same. If anyone has got any feedback they'd like to give me before it goes on, I'd be very appreciated to hear it over the next twenty-four hours or so.
Also, as a little bit of an extra, here's a interesting video short from YouTube I found about Mitchell's Fold. Somewhat better quality than mine, methinks!: